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does this sound interesting?

At the beginning, there were forty. We were running. Now there is twenty-three. Every time we'd settle in one spot all comfortably, it seems we'd be holding hands and shooting out of there as quickly as we arrived. We couldn't stay in one spot for any longer than eight months, it wasn't safe. No matter where we were, they could find us- they would find us. Nowhere was 安全 and this is how it has been my whole life, my father’s whole life and even my grandfather’s whole life. And this is how it will continue until one of us does something about it, 或者 worse… they catch us.
 readmystories posted 一年多以前
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Lady_Rebel said:
Yes, it does! Does this?

Ever wonder if 你 are who 你 appear to be? Well, Lethe Riveras wasn't what she appeared to be. For the past couple of days, weird things have happening, wings suddenly appearing on her back, a strange girl appearing at school, and the most 流行的 boy taking an interest in her. Defiantly not what she appears. Not only that but she has all the problems of high school as well-boys, school, popularity, and a controlling best friend. But no one has told her just WHO she is.


~Conspiracy~
What if the one 你 loved forgot?
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posted 一年多以前 
Sutelc22 said:
i thought it was pretty interesting.good writing.
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morganaforever said:
Wow! This is amazing. I'd 爱情 to read it. Please post it on here if 你 do. :D
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MomoThePuppy said:
Just a couple of grammatical errors. I corrected them:

At the beginning, there were forty. We were running. Now there are twenty-three. Every time we'd settle in one spot comfortably, it seemed we'd be holding hands and shooting out of there as quickly as we'd arrived. We couldn't stay in one spot for any longer than eight months, it wasn't safe. No matter where we were, they could find us- they would find us. Nowhere is 安全 and this is how it has been my whole life, my father’s whole life and even my grandfather’s whole life. And this is how it will continue until one of us does something about it, 或者 worse… they catch us.

Otherwise, sounds really good :D
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