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Help with description?

I want to describe a necklace. I was wondering if this is okay,
"The pendant looked beautiful. It had three intertwined rings with vines running through them in every direction. The vines held small beads of ruby, covering the black rhodium beneath."
或者 should I change something? If so, then could anyone help me?
 Liisamyts posted 一年多以前
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axemnas said:
It sounds real great one thing i'd do though is add a little 更多 detail to it like. what color was the rings and the vines how did they look were the vines leafy did the ruby beads sparkle?
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