i have s storyline but should i even bother 写作 it???

Ok the story line is that when guys and girls (teens to early twenties) who are really depressed and in the process of killing themselves a woman appears and takes them to an overly sterile and sorta creepy lab and they get reborn into a new simulated world(but they dont know that). They are promised a better and 更多 fullfilling life but what they really get is a harder, frightening and poor life. They encounter a whole lot of different realistic and unrealistic scenarios which test them physically and emotionally. These kids are in this simulator for the pleasure of the 'scientists'.

Anyway the kids eventually start finding each other in the simulator and as the crowd starts growing the obstacles the scientists put in place gets harder.

These kids are trapped and looking for a way out... but there is only one way...


and i am not telling 你 how:D

Please be brutally honest! i can take it:D Um also if 你 have any 问题 或者 suggestions feel free to ask:)

Oh and btw i would write it better than how i am talking atm :D