it this ok (my mj poem)

in the literacy class 你 had to make a poem about our 最喜爱的 artist. i suck at poems so i wanted to ask if this was ok it's ok if 你 don't like it i'm just glade i was able to write a poem
it's called never forget
we miss 你 everyday. Oh how people wish 你 never went away. 你 were one of the most precious gifts we'll ever know, but i guess it was your time to go. 你 gave us years of beautiful music. that we'll always love, and we'll never forget that sparkly white glove. it's true 你 were one of a kind. i'll never forget being six and watching 你 moonwalk across a stage. i knew 你 were extraordinary at the age. now years later 你 are gone, but it's ok because everyone moves on to that better place. a place were 你 don't have to deal with lies and hate. it's true 你 will be strongly missed, becasue when michael jackson died the world cried, but we'll never forget