SOME SERIOUS SKILL!!!!

I'm 写作 a fanfic called "Almost Alice" about Alice, Jacob, Jasper, and Bella, and I'd really like it if you'd review. If 你 like it, I can put up a link to the story (which is much farther along than the first chapter, I can tell 你 that). And if you're gonna be mean about it, don't bother commenting. Thanks!
-Alice <3

Almost Alice
Chapter One: Smoke


“I win,” Alice 说 smugly, holding out her hand towards Edward. “Again.”

Edward rolled his eyes as he searches his backpack for Alice’s “prize.” I smiled. She was getting to be exactly like Jasper, always betting on something....

Mysterious love

-chapter one-



It was my first 日 of 11th grade.My alarm clock went off I stayed in 床, 床上 for a little while I didnt want too get up.But after a miniute 或者 two I just got up.I went too my closet and pick out some clothes really it was just what I seen first.After I dressed my self I went down stairs too see my father in the 厨房 makeing coffee.Soon he would be on his way too work, just like every day.My father is a lawyer for the town of Bartonville,Arkansas. Every body liked him thoughs who didnt did not know him very well,but he is very queit kinda like me.Him and my mother...