OK, I know my 前一个 fanfictions pretty much suck, so... Give me some feedback, please. I think that this site is dead. :( Also, I have a new-ish OC. Let me know if I get any facts off.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white 涂层, 外套 兜帽, 罩, 发动机罩 tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to 显示 the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do 你 have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black 兜帽, 罩, 发动机罩 pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do 你 have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She 说 in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya 或者 something." "Aslyxia, 你 pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up 由 me for the story.)
~Five 分钟 Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because 你 are older and male, 你 can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are 你 cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the 座位 as I lean against the 墙 of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her 兜帽, 罩, 发动机罩 off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I 摇摆, 秋千 my legs off the 座位 and sit normally. "I hope 你 are a good partner, Edward. I can discard 你 from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered 由 this. He shoots back, "What do 你 have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white 涂层, 外套 兜帽, 罩, 发动机罩 tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to 显示 the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do 你 have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black 兜帽, 罩, 发动机罩 pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do 你 have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She 说 in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya 或者 something." "Aslyxia, 你 pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up 由 me for the story.)
~Five 分钟 Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because 你 are older and male, 你 can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are 你 cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the 座位 as I lean against the 墙 of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her 兜帽, 罩, 发动机罩 off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I 摇摆, 秋千 my legs off the 座位 and sit normally. "I hope 你 are a good partner, Edward. I can discard 你 from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered 由 this. He shoots back, "What do 你 have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."