随意问题

I know I should ask this on the 写作 spot, but it would probably get answered quickly and effectively here...

The sentence below is in the story I'm writing, I'm trying to figure out the best way to punctuate it and I figured some of the fellow grammar Nazi's on here could help.

It had always been one of Joey's 最喜爱的 traits because it seemed to suggest the eerie truth, that 吸血鬼 were although solid, moving creatures not really alive.

Jeffersonian posted 一年多以前

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随意答案

TheNumber8 said:

Though it may not be entirely grammatically correct considering the fact that I have unorthodox ways of doing everything, this is the way that I suggest 你 phrase it:

"It had always been one of Joey's 最喜爱的 traits. It seemed to suggest the eerie truth; although 吸血鬼 were solid, moving creatures, they were not really alive."

Hope to help.~

posted 一年多以前

Thanks.

Jeffersonian posted 一年多以前

You're welcome.

TheNumber8 posted 一年多以前

Sammisaurus said:

It had always been one of Joey's 最喜爱的 traits because it seemed to suggest the eerie truth: that vampires, although solid moving creatures, were not really alive.

posted 一年多以前

cassie-1-2-3 said:

Add a semicolon (;) after "truth" and a comma after "creatures".

Though if it were me, I'd say it like this:

It had always been one of Joey's 最喜爱的 traits because it seemed to suggest the eerie truth. Vampires, though solid, moving creatures, are/were not really alive.

"are/were" because I don't know what tense you're in.

posted 一年多以前