嘿 guys this is my first 粉丝 fic. Please tell me what 你 think about of it and comment!

I was sitting on the realm of Tides, at the beach. My 最喜爱的 place!
"Hey Summer," 说 my best friend Sasha, 阅读 a some catalog.
"Hey, what are 你 looking at?" I said.
"Just the newest fashions of Teen Fairy! 嘿 I'm thinking about going to Solaria to be a model. But I don't know if they're going to like me... can 你 help?"
"Sure, why not. After all your my best friend," I said.
"Cool, know lets go to the mall and pick my outfit I'm going to model for them! 说 Sasha.

更多 comming soon
Have any ideas for the part 2?