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Do 你 think I've created a "Mary sue" character?

I heard of the expression a "Mary sue" character, and if 你 don't know it's a character the 作者 (these are often found in 粉丝 fictions) has created that are seemingly perfect that everyone likes and is good at everything with almost no flaws. I'm afraid that I've created one.

So tell me if this character I've created is coming off as a "Mary sue"

The girl I've created is named Jennifer, [I just 说 I'd name her the first name I heard and that was it] she can play the guitar, is a pretty good singer -but only because she took lessons- and can dance alright, as well. But she can't ballroom dance, has a bit of a shopping + drinking problem, (She's not an alcoholic but she gets REALLY drunk when she does) she has abandonment issues, hates rats like there's no tomorrow, is VERY stubborn and is a bit of a wimp. The manliest thing about her is that she works out a little. (which she does mostly to hang out with a guy she likes) She's a pretty good size, but is no Barbie. Her past isn't all daisies and lollipops, but she's really a nice girl. She can get jealous easily and is a bit emotional. She's a charming girly-girl.

Another girl I have created is her adoptive sister... I'll tell 你 about her, too. This young lady is named Regina and is a Cree first Nation. SHE'S the one I'm most worried about...

She is exceptionally beautiful, (Cree women were known to be so beautiful that they were stolen 由 neighboring tribes, so this is logical) is really good at singing, dances a Cree dance very well, and is respectful. It seems like she's a "Mary Sue" to me sometimes... But I haven't completely developed her yet, I need to figure her out myself. I do my research... Cree people were taught back then (she was raised like "back then" but takes place in the present) to be respectful to everyone and speak only kind things to one another and if somebody did otherwise they were seen as kind of a mean person to be avoided. So that's just how she was raised... That
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-That's just who she is.
justinfangrrl posted 一年多以前
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Her 'flaws' is that she likes to tease her sister and can be sarcastic in a funny way. She has a good throwing arm, is traditional so she likes water 更多 than soft drinks 或者 果汁 and is naive when it comes to 爱情 and crushes. She's shy around men and likes wild meat 更多 than vegetables.
justinfangrrl posted 一年多以前
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I am going to include a link with a GOOD 描述 & I think your character is 更多 the one on the left <see below>
HimesamaKitsune posted 一年多以前
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LaDispute said:
Lol, yeah definitely. Even her "flaws" are pretty perfect. Just give her a tragic flaw 或者 something, like in ancient Greek plays and myths. One big thing that screws with the storyline and keeps her from being a Mary Sue.

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posted 一年多以前 
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Her archilles heel
penguin7710 posted 一年多以前
Shadowmarioking said:
你 might wanna take some tests and see for sure if shes a mary sue 或者 not. i'll 列表 two good tests:
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imo, they are quite mary sues. true, 你 give her some things she can't do, but 你 continuously describe her as "good", "alright", "charming", etc.

i would recommend removing 或者 adding certain traits so that she's not much of a mary sue and 更多 of her own character. be careful what traits 你 give her; some traits could destroy the character while others would benefit her. knowing which will make 或者 break a character is crucial

更多 importantly, don't lose the main point of this character. don't oversimplify her, but also don't give her too many traits
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personally i would also avoid labels as much as possible but that's just me
Shadowmarioking posted 一年多以前
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你 also might wanna be able to distinguish between quirks and traits. a trait is a part of someone's personality. a quirk is a strange aspect of a person.
Shadowmarioking posted 一年多以前
MasterOfFear said:
Actually yes. I do know girls like that at school, but they are seen as overachieving, annoying, preps. She seems 流行的 with no human faults that actually count as faults. Try making her 更多 realistic. If i were 你 i'd give her a deeper side so that she isn't just a vacant, girly shopaholic. Like maybe she only acts a certain way around friends.
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penguin7710 said:
OH NO 你 named her Regina? Ever seen Once Upon a Time (the TV show) The evil queens name is Regina. That's why when ever I see someone working at walmart if their name tag says Regina 或者 Cora after we leave I go "her name is Regina!" 或者 "Her name is Cora!"
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Book-Freak said:
Jennifer seems fine but 你 definitely need to give Regina some flaws. Flesh her out a bit.
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HimesamaKitsune said:
Here 你 go. Take a look. I found this for you. It shows two basic characters and traits:

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Not sure, but she is definately NOT perfect and not even mediocre (maybe just boring) when 你 have so many detail. Like the dancing- if 你 don't want her to stand out then just say she can dance "alight" - do things "alright" - where NOTHING is of particular mention 或者 extraordinary 或者 different. If she drinks [& gets drunk TOO when she does-which is sure NOT normal] that is a major flaw and a Mary Sue would not have that, plus "abandonment issues" - no, not sure about that either. That is 更多 to her even than needed maybe & 更多 character forming if 你 get into those details. "Mary Sue"'s r also very plain and very boring. Not sure why 你 want that. Personality isn't all things anyway, it is "reasons."
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 Here 你 go. Take a look. I found this for you. It shows two basic characters and traits: http://www.deviantart.com/download/5470853/Mary_Sue___How_to_Tell.jpg Not sure, but she is definately NOT perfect and not even mediocre (maybe just boring) when 你 have so many detail. Like the dancing- if 你 don't want her to stand out then just say she can dance "alight" - do things "alright" - where NOTHING is of particular mention 或者 extraordinary 或者 different. If she drinks [& gets drunk TOO when she does-which is sure NOT normal] that is a [i]major[/i] flaw and a Mary Sue would not have that, plus "abandonment issues" - no, not sure about that either. That is 更多 to her even than needed maybe & 更多 character forming if 你 get into those details. [b]"Mary Sue"'s r also [i]very plain and very boring[/i].[/b] Not sure why 你 want that. Personality isn't all things anyway, it is "reasons."
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ivoryphills said:
This might help:
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