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Hey! I wrote a beginning of a song.. I didn't like it that much.. so do u think I should continue it?

it's about a break up

(More Than This)
After all that we've been through
Don't 你 let go on me now
I don't want any 更多 tears
Don't 你 bring me down


Chorus:
I swear I'd give 你 更多 that this
If 你 can stay like this
I swear I'd 爱情 你 更多 than this
Anything 你 wish
If I knew that you'd let go, oh
 smsooom posted 一年多以前
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XxKeithHarkinxX said:
It's shitty. and kinda of,bland.

It's really flat,it needs depth to it.

It honestly up to you.
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posted 一年多以前 
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Exactly
smsooom posted 一年多以前
brandonaz said:
nahhh it's too boring and unoriginal tbh but if 你 want to be a pop 星, 星级 it's no worse than everything else on the radio
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posted 一年多以前 
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That's what I thought of :/
smsooom posted 一年多以前
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So scrap it.
brandonaz posted 一年多以前
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ok :)
smsooom posted 一年多以前
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@brandon, that's what I thought XD
XxKeithHarkinxX posted 一年多以前
Solas said:
I don't want to sound mean, but I think there are too many platitudes - stringing cliches together isn't good song writing.

Something else I'm wondering is: why did 你 choose to write about a break up?

I've never written a song before, but if I were to give 你 some 建议 then it would be to come up with an original subject. Everybody writes about break ups - be unique! I'm sure you've had plenty of meaningful life experiences that are far 更多 interesting. :)

Hope this helps a little.
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posted 一年多以前 
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It did :) Thnx .. :D and I don't know actually why I chose this :P
smsooom posted 一年多以前
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I didn't think so. That's probably what the problem was. Not to sound cheesy, but you'll probably find it easier to write about something 你 really believe in. Good luck with your song! :)
Solas posted 一年多以前
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