Hi... STILL new here, and I have a creative 写作 camp over summer, and I was wondering if this is a good poem.

Cursed 由 Marrisa Richards

When 你 have been cursed, your life turns around. The skies tun gray and the 火, 消防 burns your soul.

No one can save 你 from this darkness
Except yourself

Run, hide, hurry! Save yourself and don't get damaged

They will come for 你 if 你 are weak
They will come for 你 if 你 are strong

It's not a dream; nothing's ever a dream

So wake up

Now before they come

Now, 你 have waited to long 你 must let the beast feed into your soul.

Thanks!!!!!! :D

(Yeah it Doesn't rhyme but that's because its a SONG and it sounds so much better sung then read :])


I don't want to be a burden
But I can feel my life is burning
Someone please put out the flames

I can't take the heat
I need a cold release
I'm begging, put me down

I can't take the feeling
It's 更多 than I can handle
The flames too bright
Scorching my life
I need to feel nothing again

I try to grab the water
But color burns my eyes
I recede into the darkness
Where the pain isn't so high

I'm trapped inside the blaze
I'm trapped inside the blaze

你 try to help. To heal
But all who try must pay
The 火, 消防 throws 你 back
It owns me now
你 run while 你 still can

Cause I'm trapped inside the blaze
I'm trapped inside the blaze

I can't take the feeling
It's 更多 than I can handle
I choke on smokey air
I need to feel nothing again
But I will never get the privilege

I'm trapped inside the blaze (And I'll never get out)
I'm trapped inside the blaze
And I'll NEVER get out.