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there is a smile on her face
she doesnt know why its there on her face
she doesnt feel happy

she laughs with her friends
she doesnt want them to know how broken she is

her friend texts her mean things in class
she holds the tears at bay
a brick is on her heart
she acts if everything is ok

she gets home
her brother tells her what she has done wrong this time.
she hold up her act at being happy

she gets on her 安全 place
the computer
but even here she cant get away
she gets mean and anger messages
from people she doesnt know in real life

she takes off her mask
she cries as she sits in her bed
she looks at the texts her friend sent her.
she wonders why she is 老友记 with the girl named vickie
when Vickie only hurts her over and over.

she looks at the scars on her arm that she made
her mom forgot the promise
the promise for her to stop cutting if her mom stops drinking
she saw her mom drinking the other day.
it hurt her.

she sits in her room with the lights off
she is tired of living but scared of dying.

she is just a scared little girl
not the strong girl that can take anything that is throw at her
 starfirey232 posted 一年多以前
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Face_of_Music said:
*Tear**Tear*
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 *Tear**Tear*
posted 一年多以前 
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:) i'll take that as 你 thought it was sad. it is my life story right now. i hope my life gets better
starfirey232 posted 一年多以前
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wow... same with me, the story, exept for the cutting part and the mom drinking part. i dont live with my mom
Face_of_Music posted 一年多以前
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my mom stopped and even 说 she was sorry the other day. i wrote this song a week 以前 或者 so. but i feel like she still doesnt get how broken i am. and i am not cutting that much. just alittle because i just started.
starfirey232 posted 一年多以前
icuSTALKER said:
Story of my life right now :/
Well written though!:D that is so sad.....I'm serious that is totally me right now
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So sad, well written, and good job!!:D
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posted 一年多以前 
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thanks and this is the story of my life too right now. it sucks. the girl in the song is me
starfirey232 posted 一年多以前
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Same here, except for the drunken mom part :(. I'm sorry :(
icuSTALKER posted 一年多以前
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its ok. my mom stopped and even 说 she was sorry the other day. i wrote this song a week 以前 或者 so. but i feel like she still doesnt get how broken i am.
starfirey232 posted 一年多以前
Shadowmarioking said:
I've seen plenty of poems that are similar to this, and quite frankly, I don't like any of them. I feel as if there's nothing original about them, no offense.

This type of poem won't strike as "interesting" towards people like me. The spelling/grammar should be fixed as well, along with making the poem 更多 figurative so that it isn't so straightforward as it was.

That's just my opinion though.
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well thank 你 for your opinion. i didnt know there was poems like this. i just wrote it from my heart. thank 你 for taking the time to read it
starfirey232 posted 一年多以前
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^You're welcome.
Shadowmarioking posted 一年多以前
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