can 你 please give me some criticism on this?
I was normal once 或者 i thought I was, at least, until I knew otherwise,then I didn't know how i could have missed it i mean it was so obvious but i suppose that was just it, it was to obvious and sometimes i wonder what it would be like if what happened that night never happened but it probably wouldn't have mattered what happened that horrible night because it just sped up what was already there, sure maybe it would have been easier if i had known what I was but maybe it wouldn't have been.
你 see before all this happened I lived a very good life we were very rich and we lived in a palace,like really, no joke, i didn't know why we lived like we did not until i learned the truth and, 你 know what, ignorance was better because now I'm on the run for my life with my little sister(Emily) and a few 老友记 of ours(Matt,Damien,Alice,and jack)(and let me tell 你 NOT FUN).... but we'll get to all that later first your probably wondering 由 now what is she exactly well ill tell 你 what i am,my name is Alica brown I'm sixteen and I'm a were cat,yes a were cat, and no we are nothing like were wolfs(we are much better) as a matter of fact we are pretty much enemies with them. but you'll hear about all that later....for now ill bring 你 back to the night that would change my life forever.
*it's the beginning to a story I'm 写作 but I need some 建议 on what i could do to improve it, thanks*