I don't like Twilight. I find the characters shallow; the plot boring and cliche; and the hidden messages frightening. But in the hands of another 作者 - someone who wouldn't let their religious upbringing, their misogynistic views, and their twisted romantic ideals colour the story - it could have been really fantastic.
First off, the grammar would have to be fixed. The purple prose minimised and the 总体, 整体 写作 polished up.
Next the characters would have to be made realistic, their actions have an effect on the plot, and their history an effect on them.
I am totally ignoring Breaking Dawn in this because Stephenie Meyer broke all the rules in there. [Vampires cant have children, they have no body fluids, etc etc] Reasons i think Jacob is better for Bella than Edward is: 1. Edward/Bellas relationship is based on appearance. She is constantly talking about how good he looks, how velvety his voice is, how graceful he is, etc. She 说 Jacob was beautiful once 或者 twice and called his new muscles impressive once 或者 that she is jealous of his tan skin. She thinks Edward is too good for her because she looks plain 下一个 to him. She thinks Jacob is too...
I'm just sayin' Bella is one of the worst role 模特 ever when it comes to love, sex and life choices and should not have allowed to be published in any shape 或者 form. I mean, when she's made the heroine of the story and marketted at teenage girls.
1. She's obsessively in 爱情 with a control freak stalker.
Unfortunately it seems the vast majority of the Twilight fangirls are too with the very same freak.
2. She wants him so bad that she'll abandone everyone else she loves so that she could be with him. Even when it means she'll practically have to become a blood-drinking corpse.
1. Twilight is the product of an immature writer. It reads like something out of my notebook from freshman year. 2. The only difference between Twilight and fanfiction.net is marginally better grammar. 3. And even that isn’t so great sometimes. English major fail. 4. I’ve read fanfiction that is lightyears better than Twitripe. 5. The prose is purple amethyst! Deep, luscious, dazzling amethyst that scintillates and glitters incandescently in the sun! 6. Not to mention, it’s also insanely repetitive. 7. THESAURUS ABUSE! Fancy words are not necessarily better words. 8. The storyline is trite and...