嘿 guys I'm 写作 a story for a project and I want to know what 你 guys think of what I have so far feel free to leave 评论 或者 suggestions.
When I was a little girl my dad suddenly left. I remember being really close to him. Sometimes he would act strange though. Like he never stayed in one place long and was always looking behind him like he thought someone was following him. And one 日 he 说 he had to go for a little while, and he never came back. He was the best father I could ask for. He was kind and always did what was best for the family. And that is why it broke my 心 to find out that he wasn’t coming back. At first I didn’t believe it and I didn’t want to. The only thing I wanted was my dad to come though the door and tell me everything is ok. Life went on without him days turned into months. Disbelief turned into betrayal and sorrow. If it wasn’t for my brother Jason I wouldn’t know what I’ll do.
A two years later my mom gave up hope of his return and married Robert T. Harry. That is a lot to put on a eight 年 old 嘿 your father left and he doesn’t 爱情 us anymore but don’t worry I am going to marry I guy I just meet that hates you! Isn’t that great? I never liked him and felt she could have done better. He seems like a really nice guy at first. Kind smile and sense of humor. But don’t let that fool you. Because as soon as my mother turns around he beets us and does unspeakable things. And my mother never sees a thing of it. And get so mad when I “LIE” about something so cruel. But the 日 she 说 I do was the 日 I 迷失 my mother forever. Soon after me and my brother could not take it anymore so Jason left to try to find out what happened to dad. I never saw him again.
Jason took care of me looked out for me when everyone else would not. He could always make time for me and always had 答案 to my problems. I don’t know how he did it but he stepped up to help out in anyway he could sense dad left. He took care of the family. He even took two jobs after school to help pay the bills before the devil came. He never complained. So when I found out I was losing him too the one piece of my 心 that was left shattered. How was I going to make it though now? Before he left though he gave me a 项链 shaped like a 星, 星级 and told me it like the north 星, 星级 guiding people to there destiny and no matter how far the distance we will always end up finding each other. And told me he would come back and that I wasn’t alone.
The 下一个 four years my life has been a living nightmare. But then everything started to change the night I meet a man named Blake. I was walking home. It was dark usually is around the time I get off work at the animal shelter. It was cool night still damp from the earlier rain. A nice clear sky the full moon peaking out of the clouds. I sighed. I was just turning the corner when someone grabbed me. Get off me! Who are you? Panic shot through me. I was about to scream for help when he slammed me angst the wall. His arm cutting my air supply. The harder I fought the titer he held me. Now 你 can make it easier on yourself 由 doing everything I say 或者 你 can be difficult and end up never seeing the light of 日 again. Which is it going to be? I don’t know who 你 are but 你 are making a big mistake.
Then I kneed him in the gut kicked him back. He grunted in pain oohhh 你 are going to wish 你 didn’t do that. He lunged at me and I dogged. I managed to get in a couple of kicks and punches before he got lucky and grabbed a hold of me. He didn’t hesitate to slam my head into a wall. I blacked out.
When I woke I was gagged and my feet and hands bounded. And had a killer headache. It was dark and I realized I was in a cramped box! Great I’m mail. Then I remembered I had a pocketknife in my pocket. If I could just get to it. My hand made it’s way to my 涂层, 外套 pocket. My fingers brushed the cool sufferance of the knife. My fingers curled around the knife. I clicked the button and the nice sharp blade slid out. Carefully I moved the blade up and down. Feeling the ropes loosen. Snap! I smiled pure joy flooded into me. I brought the 刀 up to my face and in one smooth slice of the blade cut the gag of my face. Now just to get out of this BOX! I stabbed the 刀 as hard as I could into the side of the 箱, 板条箱 corner and tried to pry the thing open. Creeeekkkkk! So much for sneaking out without anyone knowing.
And that was the entro to the keeper of the forbidden light. plz plz plz tell me what 你 think and tell me any suggestions I can make. Thanks for reading
When I was a little girl my dad suddenly left. I remember being really close to him. Sometimes he would act strange though. Like he never stayed in one place long and was always looking behind him like he thought someone was following him. And one 日 he 说 he had to go for a little while, and he never came back. He was the best father I could ask for. He was kind and always did what was best for the family. And that is why it broke my 心 to find out that he wasn’t coming back. At first I didn’t believe it and I didn’t want to. The only thing I wanted was my dad to come though the door and tell me everything is ok. Life went on without him days turned into months. Disbelief turned into betrayal and sorrow. If it wasn’t for my brother Jason I wouldn’t know what I’ll do.
A two years later my mom gave up hope of his return and married Robert T. Harry. That is a lot to put on a eight 年 old 嘿 your father left and he doesn’t 爱情 us anymore but don’t worry I am going to marry I guy I just meet that hates you! Isn’t that great? I never liked him and felt she could have done better. He seems like a really nice guy at first. Kind smile and sense of humor. But don’t let that fool you. Because as soon as my mother turns around he beets us and does unspeakable things. And my mother never sees a thing of it. And get so mad when I “LIE” about something so cruel. But the 日 she 说 I do was the 日 I 迷失 my mother forever. Soon after me and my brother could not take it anymore so Jason left to try to find out what happened to dad. I never saw him again.
Jason took care of me looked out for me when everyone else would not. He could always make time for me and always had 答案 to my problems. I don’t know how he did it but he stepped up to help out in anyway he could sense dad left. He took care of the family. He even took two jobs after school to help pay the bills before the devil came. He never complained. So when I found out I was losing him too the one piece of my 心 that was left shattered. How was I going to make it though now? Before he left though he gave me a 项链 shaped like a 星, 星级 and told me it like the north 星, 星级 guiding people to there destiny and no matter how far the distance we will always end up finding each other. And told me he would come back and that I wasn’t alone.
The 下一个 four years my life has been a living nightmare. But then everything started to change the night I meet a man named Blake. I was walking home. It was dark usually is around the time I get off work at the animal shelter. It was cool night still damp from the earlier rain. A nice clear sky the full moon peaking out of the clouds. I sighed. I was just turning the corner when someone grabbed me. Get off me! Who are you? Panic shot through me. I was about to scream for help when he slammed me angst the wall. His arm cutting my air supply. The harder I fought the titer he held me. Now 你 can make it easier on yourself 由 doing everything I say 或者 你 can be difficult and end up never seeing the light of 日 again. Which is it going to be? I don’t know who 你 are but 你 are making a big mistake.
Then I kneed him in the gut kicked him back. He grunted in pain oohhh 你 are going to wish 你 didn’t do that. He lunged at me and I dogged. I managed to get in a couple of kicks and punches before he got lucky and grabbed a hold of me. He didn’t hesitate to slam my head into a wall. I blacked out.
When I woke I was gagged and my feet and hands bounded. And had a killer headache. It was dark and I realized I was in a cramped box! Great I’m mail. Then I remembered I had a pocketknife in my pocket. If I could just get to it. My hand made it’s way to my 涂层, 外套 pocket. My fingers brushed the cool sufferance of the knife. My fingers curled around the knife. I clicked the button and the nice sharp blade slid out. Carefully I moved the blade up and down. Feeling the ropes loosen. Snap! I smiled pure joy flooded into me. I brought the 刀 up to my face and in one smooth slice of the blade cut the gag of my face. Now just to get out of this BOX! I stabbed the 刀 as hard as I could into the side of the 箱, 板条箱 corner and tried to pry the thing open. Creeeekkkkk! So much for sneaking out without anyone knowing.
And that was the entro to the keeper of the forbidden light. plz plz plz tell me what 你 think and tell me any suggestions I can make. Thanks for reading
